Eric's Critique From Week #5

After reviewing the critique of Eric's week 5 work completed by Nikita Driscoll. I feel that the critique was very complicated to understand. The mechanics were very strong. Overall the critique was not valuable to me due to it being very complicated.

The critique was very complicated to me regarding its length. Also the wording used was very difficult to follow the point the writer was trying to get across. There was a lack of quotes to verify the points that were made.


Mechanics were a very strong point in this work. The grammar and punctuation was very well done. Spelling was done with perfection. The mechanics were the strongest point from my perspective review.

This essay was not valuable to me due to the wording used was very hard for me to follow. The flow seemed to be out of order regarding the points that were weak and which were meant to be strong, for example weakest to strongest points in that order. The thesis statement was clear with fair transition sentences.

In conclusion the work was very hard to follow and complicated which the points are listed above. Mechanics were the strong point and were done well. The essay had no value to me and was to complicated and hard to understand the important points.

Revision Strategy Essay (Week # 5)

After reading and analyzing week one response/analysis essay, which was based off "Those Winter Sundays" by Robert Hayden. I feel that the that the spelling, grammar and transition sentences were well written. The tone was weak.

All words were spelled correctly. Punctuation and grammar was in accordance with MLA. The flow of all sentences was well done and easy to understand. Quotes and citations were also in accordance with MLA.

The thesis was well worded and very clear. All points the thesis contained were in order with the paragraphs. The thesis was explained in detail in each paragraph. The conclusion covered all points listed in the thesis and was well worded. Transition sentences had a good flow and covered all points in an accurate manner.

The tone could have been stronger to get a better point across. Rhetorical devices if used would have played a role in adding emphasis to the essay as a hole. Tone is a very important component for the writer to convey information to the reader who is not familiar with the poem. One example is to place a question in the text for interpretation purposes.

In conclusion the response/analysis essay bases on "Those Winter Sundays" by Robert Hayden was done farely well. Spelling and grammer were the strongest points for the essay. The tone was weak as described above regarding emphasizing on important points to get a strong point across. Thesis and transition sentences were clear and had good flow.

Those Winter Sundays Revised (Week # 4)

                                              Those Winter Sundays

"Those Winter Sundays" by Robert Hayden. My analysis of the short poem is that the writer is referring to his father who had good family values, work ethic and a daily routine. The person had family values and worked very hard all week. He had the same routine weekdays, as well as every Sunday. The man is described as being a rugged type person, with good family values, work ethic and a daily routine.

This man had good family values which are described. He had values to work hard and take care of his family. The mans priority was not himself or body, which was shown from his "cracked hands that ached from labor in the weekday weather" (Hayden 3-4) but was to only care for his family and others. The man worked regardless of how exhausted or tired he was.

The individual has a good work ethic which showed with his hard work all week at his place of employment. While at work he was very aggressive with his duties and very organized with tasks. He "would rise and dress, fearing the chronic angers of that house" (Hayden 8-9). The man was well aware of the poor state of his house he did not let it discourage him. His work ethic at home was also very structured with the same repetitive routine. His good work ethic is an example of a person with good character.

As described he has a daily routine which is his ambitious hard work each day of the week. As he said "polished my good shoes as well" (Hayden 12) and dressed himself in a certain order and time of day every Sunday. There is a lot of positive life lessons to learn from this person.

In conclusion the tone of this writer was very strong regarding this old time hard working person. He had shown good family values, work ethic and consistent daily routine. The poem was based on the individuals Sunday routine during the winter months. The writer is getting his point across to the readers that his character and habits were very strong and concise

Those Winter Sundays Essay (Class #3 Homework)

  Those Winter Sundays

"Those Winter Sundays" by Robert Hayden. My analysis of the short poem is that the writer is referring to his father who had good family values, work ethic and daily routine. The person had family values and worked very hard all week. He had the same routine weekdays, as well as every Sunday. The man is described as being a rugged type person.

He had values to work hard and take care of his family. The mans priority was not himself or body, which was shown from his "cracked hands that ached from labor in the weekday weather" (line 3) but was to only care for his family and others. The man worked regardless of how exhausted or tired he was.

The individual worked hard all week at his place of employment. While at work he was very aggressive with his duties and very organized with his tasks. He "would rise and dress,
fearing the chronic angers of that house." (line 9) His work ethic at home was also very structured with the same repetitive routine.

The routine of the man was his ambitious hard work each day of the week. As he said "polished my good shoes as well" (line 12) and dressed himself in a certain order and time of day every Sunday.

In conclusion the tone of this writer was very strong regarding this old time hard working person. He had shown good family values, work ethic and consistent routine. The poem was based on the individuals Sunday routine during the winter months. The writer is getting his point across to the readers that his character and habits were very strong and concise.









     

We Real Cool

My view point of the intent of the poem "We Real Cool" is about a young person that quit school and engages in undesirable activity.

The person in this poem, along with friends are aware that the decisions they have made are bad. These decisions are destine to cause them to live short lives.

It is apparent that there is illegal drugs involved and this may be the influence on this person quitting school and knowing that the consequence is early death.

This person is very choppy and delusional in his wording and some what unclear in getting his point across in the text.

In Just

The intent of the poem "in Just", from my view point is that the writer is writing about spring coming and kids playing at the park.

There is an adult man that is happy to inform the kids in the area that spring is here and it is time to play and have fun.

This person the (balloonman) is an individual that is child friendly and likes to see children have fun, and promotes happy times. I believe the writer had this type of experience as a child and wants to share this with all his readers.

The writer is very colorful in his writing to get his point across by describing activities that the kids are engaging in.

In summary this is a man that enjoys spring and seeing kids at play outdoors having fun with friends.

Musee des Beaux Arts

My focus regarding this poem was on how there is good and bad in the world and how things change.

After reading it is apparent to me that you can go from suffering to something changing for the better. Different people perceive situations different and react to bad and good in a different manner. Also, another point that was of interest to me was if you need someone to help you get through a difficult situation you can seek help and it will be there.

This is a very deeply worded poem with a lot of meaning on the ups and downs in life and how life can change, and how it can be perceived different. The above is my understanding/perception after reading.